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i wrote a poem for you by ~iamCONtext:iconiamCONtext:

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                     she used to s   p    r    e   a   d
                                       f    i   r   e   f   l   i  e   s
        on her neck to feel the stars

                  "it makes me happy"
            


         god i dont know
                                 I DONT KNOW
                 what to do with my eyes
        
        they keep getting in the way of my dreams
                    showing me reality
                   and all that real stuff

                                    wish i could see birds
                scratching the sun with their moonstained talons
                       
                                   they all follow instinct
                         discovering oceans already dreamed


          i dont know what to do with my eyes
                        

                              we sat on the front porch
         reminiscing
                             playing our cherryoak guitars
         until the fireflies flashed morse code at us
            "come play with us
                                       we will make you feel stars"

        
         god i want
                           i want for her breathing
                                         her silhouette against the bathroom light in the dark hallway
                                         her warmth against me watching black and white movies til sunrise
             "it makes me happy"
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Author's Comments

i looked through an old scrapbook of ours
there was a picture of you dancing
independence day
fireworks emblazoned on your skin
and i thought "hm


i miss her"

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~LabelMeLow Jul 11, 2007, 12:28:16 PM
It does make me happy, though. :P

you should always listen to the fireflies.

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~iamCONtext Jul 11, 2007, 12:41:27 PM
<3

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Ciò è vita e questa è gioia: un'ora di abbraccio ed allora morire.
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~iamCONtext Jul 11, 2007, 12:46:25 PM
<3

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Ciò è vita e questa è gioia: un'ora di abbraccio ed allora morire.
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~Alchemy-of-the-Heart Jul 23, 2007, 6:27:13 PM
Awww kawaii! :) I LOVE THIS POEM! It is so very lovely. Your usual unconventional style works really well here, adding so much to the poem, particularly the bolding on various words and the formatting on the line "i don't know what to do with my eyes." The idea of "feeling the stars" is really interesting, and I love it. My favorite lines are "wish i could see birds / scratching the sun with their moonstained talons" - the imagery and juxtaposition in those two lines is positively mesmerizing. Um, I think that's about all the rambly praise I have. Other than "Omagosh, guitars!" (Slightly obsessed right now... why am I on the computer rather than playing guitar??)

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Love is the movement. [link] To Write Love on Her Arms

"But yield who will to their separation, my object in living is to unite." ~Robert Frost

My God is faithful!!
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~iamCONtext Jul 23, 2007, 6:59:52 PM
i'm always on the computer WHILE playing guitar :D

it's the best way to do these things.

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Ciò è vita e questa è gioia: un'ora di abbraccio ed allora morire.
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~Alchemy-of-the-Heart Jul 23, 2007, 7:05:00 PM
Heehee. I do that too sometimes.... and chew on my pick when I run out of things to play.... :XD:

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Love is the movement. [link] To Write Love on Her Arms

"But yield who will to their separation, my object in living is to unite." ~Robert Frost

My God is faithful!!
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~iamCONtext Jul 23, 2007, 8:05:34 PM
xD i've broken a bunch of picks doing that.

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Ciò è vita e questa è gioia: un'ora di abbraccio ed allora morire.
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~Alchemy-of-the-Heart Jul 24, 2007, 12:45:29 PM
Lolz. I haven't broken a pick yet doing that; it's a habit I only picked up recently..... I guess I don't break things too often; I've been playing for two years and still haven't broken a single string. :XD:

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Love is the movement. [link] To Write Love on Her Arms

"But yield who will to their separation, my object in living is to unite." ~Robert Frost

My God is faithful!!
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~iamCONtext Jul 24, 2007, 1:46:07 PM
i've broken two :(

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Ciò è vita e questa è gioia: un'ora di abbraccio ed allora morire.
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